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Losing the Word Weight — How to Put Your Manuscript on a Diet

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When I finished my manuscript for my second novel, it clocked in at 160,000 words.
Pretty impressive, huh?  Double the word count of my first novel.  A little long, maybe, but hey, J.K. Rowling has a few novels out that approach the 200,000 mark.  And it had taken me several years to string them all together, so those words were GOLD, baby.
Okay.  Maybe not.
Somewhere on my writing journey, I’d read that when you think you’ve finished, cut 10 percent of your manuscript to make it sing.  I cut 20,000 words, bringing it down to a barely-there 140,000, then sent it off to my agent.
Who was not as delighted as I’d hoped he’d be.
The characters were compelling, he explained, but all those words slowed down the pace.  Perhaps I should consider cutting a few more words.
Like, 40,000.
Ouch.
After a few nights of chocolate and wine, I realized he was right.  With all those words, my characters were suffocating.  They needed room to move, and the reader needed space to envision them.  So I did the big rewrite first.
And I looked at the story with fresh eyes.
And I got down to 120,000 words.  A good, solid story.  But still too long.  Not because of some arbitrary word count, but because when I reread it, I still felt as if the pacing could be tighter, the tension higher.  A trusted beta reader agreed.
So I put my manuscript on a diet. These are the steps I followed to lose the word weight:
*I sought inspiration. 
I reread several of my favorite tightly-strung works, ranging from novels by Lee Child to short stories by Amy Bloom to poetry by Billy Collins.  I try to pick apart how they make every word serve multiple functions.
*I used the search function to find words that end in ly. If they were adverbs, I killed them without mercy. (Mostly.)
*I did another scan for adjectives, paring them down to the absolute essentials.
*I looked at all my dialogue tags and made it a game to see how many I could eliminate before the reader lost track of who was speaking.
*I divided my manuscript into three sections.  Every week, I worked on one section, randomly opening to a page in that section and making sure it was as tight and polished as possible.
These efforts got me to about 108,000 words of solid writing.   My characters were true, my pacing faster, my plot tighter.  But I still felt the story could be improved, and I’d looked at it so many times I’d run out of ways to keep my eyes fresh.
The next step?
I hired an editor.
More on that in my next WU blog post.
In the meantime, what are some of your secrets for cutting a bloated manuscript down to size? (I really want to know!)

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About Liz MichalskiLiz Michalski's first novel, Evenfall, was published by Berkley Books (Penguin). Liz has been a reporter, an editor, and a freelance writer. In her previous life, she wrangled with ill-tempered horses and oversized show dogs. These days she's downsized to one husband, two children and a medium-sized mutt.Web | Facebook | More Posts

"Your manuscript is both good and original, but the part that is good is not original, and the part that is original is not good"
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